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i wrote this for an introductory hook and i want to know what you think of it, what should i add or take away and whether should i add a quote or not?

*Hearts Restored is a romance story about two ponies named Elizabeth rose and Edward hyde who years ago had their hearts broken, both had difficulties in life, yet one day at a pub, they found each other, how will they find love despite knowing their past, and will they get through it together?*

i want to avoid it being cheezy or anything that might make the reader go "ewww" due to how sappy it is so i need help so i know if I'm doing well or not

i wrote this for an introductory hook and i want to know what you think of it, what should i add or take away and should i add a quote or not?

*Hearts Restored is a romance story about two ponies named Elizabeth rose and Edward hyde who years ago had their hearts broken, both had difficulties in life, yet one day at a pub, they found each other, how will they find love despite knowing their past, and will they get through it together?*

i want to avoid it being cheezy or anything that might make the reader go "ewww" due to how sappy it is so i need help so i know if I'm doing well or not

i wrote this for an introductory hook and i want to know what you think of it, what should i add or take away and should i add a quote or not?

*Hearts Restored is a romance story about two ponies named Elizabeth rose and Edward hyde who years ago had their hearts broken, both had difficulties in life, yet one day at a pub, they found each other, how will they find love despite knowing their past, and will they get through it together?*

i want to avoid it being cheezy or anything that might make the reader go "ewww" due to how sappy it is so i need help so i know if I'm doing well or not

i wrote this for an introductory hook and i want to know what you think of it, what should i add or take away and should i add a quote or not?

Hearts Restored is a romance story about two ponies named Elizabeth rose and Edward hyde who years ago had their hearts broken, both had difficulties in life, yet one day at a pub, they found each other, how will they find love despite knowing their past, and will they get through it together?

i want to avoid it being cheezy or anything that might make the reader go "ewww" due to how sappy it is so i need help so i know if I'm doing well or not