@BakuHaku  
that….could actually work….after this incident she becomes alarmed and goes to see celestia her teacher about this….if this is ok with you I would be fine with it…however you would need to expand on royally screwed if you want consistency….

At least, that’s how I deal with the sudden abruptness. It’s probably the best way to just enjoy this comic to its fullest for those who find this particularly disturbing.

So, this was a bit of a whiplash in story drama. For all those complaining, it helps to imagine this taking place some time after what just happened, where Spike has time to forgive Twilight, accept his new body, and Twilight redeems herself. It’s a porn comic, so there are limitations, unless you want a 300 page comic of almost no porn.

@Mad Black  
bro, you got about 130 comments on this page and the previous to read through.

I do not think it is appropriate to talk this kind of stuff down like that. Because Twilight just raped a close friend, and the victim should not take it like “bad stuff happens bro” and be the one to do the pep talk to its rapist. Especially if this is the second time this happened.  
Well I hope there is a reason in Twilight behavior, other than that she has a dick and a testosterone problem. Some kind of curse that goes with that spell or something.
 
 
Sorry if this sounds like sjw bs, it is just my opinion about this particular situation.

@Meanlucario  
we’re still basically in the prologue, man. When I planned this out prior to making it, I was estimating a minimum 1000 pages before I ended, and we only just passed the 100 mark a couple weeks ago. It might not actually end up that long at all, but we’ve got a ways to go. There’s also something that might be coming up in the next chapter (if the vote goes the way I think it will), that might shed a little light on the situation. Just remember, Twilight blames herself for everything all the time ever.

You may want to read this, Baku. It’s kind of important.  
After reading the Screwed arc and skimming Applejack and Rarity’s (I’m not very much into futa on futa, only futa on female), there were a few things you will need to work on. First, the characters aren’t suffering enough. What I mean by this is that in the end of the Screwed arc, Twilight says that all of her friends are suffering from her mistake. The problem is that she’s not quite right. Rainbow quit the Wonderbolts, but than boned Scoots, so she’s not entirely miserable. Fluttershy was OK being outside in Dash’s arc, so her being raped by Twi is only known if you read the comments you made. Rarity seems glad to have sex, and doesn’t seem to mind not fitting in her dresses. Pinkie seemed to be mostly concerned with Mr. Cake, who didn’t mind, and the time/place. And AJ, the one who is suppose to be the one most devastated by the change, seems fine with giving Rarity blow jobs after small talk. AJ wants to right the wrong that her parents did and be there for her children, and now is unable to fulfil a life goal she set for herself, Who probably sees herself worst than the parents that left her and her sibling, and in this hentai she’s just in one comic for a rarijack ship.  
The problem is that, to make this work, you need to show them suffering for more than three pages. Porn doesn’t want to show the characters in pain, unless it’s sexual pain. This may be a problem. From where I’m standing, you have two chooses: a hentai with a plot, or a story with porn. You will need to choose.

@BakuHaku  
A sex story with a well written story can make the sex INTENSELY more enjoyable when it comes around. It can just be difficult due to either over-eager desires/fan pushing to GET to the sex, or even mis-rememebering a past event that now conflicts with a current situation.

@Daneasaur  
like I said, it’s been a while since I watched the episode, so I don’t remember how the events actually went down :V  
and yeah, i think it’s more just the impression the fandom has made on me about twi’s character than anything else. It was kinda unintentional, but for the drama I’m going for in the story, I like having that aspect to it. Slypon and Lumo have done similar things as well, and those are 2 of my favorite comics in the world, so that may have something to do with it.
 
 
@Meanlucario  
I might have to re-think the reading order I put these in. Initially all of these stories were supposed to be happening within a few days of Royally Screwed, while Twi was still out of town, and this was the first one after she came back, but I could probably re-arrange them fairly easily and have Royally Screwed happen directly after this. These aren’t necessarily in or out of chronological order thus far, save for chapters 3 and 4 as they kinda directly tie into one another; I just kinda wanted vignettes of their lives that didn’t have too much direct continuity from moment-to-moment; only the later chapters would really be heavily dependent on what happened in previous ones. So this might end up as the impetus that causes her to go see Celestia and Luna in the originating comic of this series.

@BakuHaku  
You might want to also want to give a reason why Twilight hasn’t got herself checked yet. I would think Twi would look into why she raped Flutter, as you stated in the comments, and would be careful not to do the same to her other friends. Just something you might want to think/work on.

@BakuHaku  
You’re not wrong, Rarity did fall, but that same fate was also going to befall Spike, as the reason in the first place that he dropped her was because he gave up his greed, shrunk to “baby” size, and both of them were halfway up a mountain.
 
As for twilight going off the handle with magic, that hasn’t happened, even when she tapped into the Dark Magic that Sombra used, it didn’t do anything to her other than open the wrong door. (However, Raven from Teen Titans HAS gone off the handle with magic that was too powerful for her to control and threw her off the deep end. Same VA). The closest twilight has gone to “going off the handle” was done in Lesson Zero, and that had nothing to do with her magic, just her tendency to over-study things and overthink them.
 
RARITY on the other hand has gone batshit crazy with her magic in combination with her personality (Inspiration manifestation) of wanting to “Give” to everyone, wound up “over giving” and “giving too much of what SHE wanted”, which took Spike to break her out of it.
 
Indeed, I do look forward to what you intend to have playout in the future.
 
I find that constructive conversations in a sensible manner are better put to use instead of raving like a lunatic and letting emotions get the better of you, so I’m gonna try to write like this more often.

@Daneasaur  
it’s been quite a while since I’ve seen the episode, but I distinctly remember the climax being Rarity falling to her death from a mountain because Spike tried to steal her along with the ruby he’d given her.  
Spike just wanted to steal shit, but ended up hurting one of his friends in his blind greed.  
Twi just wants to get her rocks off, but ended up hurting one of her friends in her blind lust.  
I think the analogy holds up alright, but it is a pretty subjective matter, so to-may-to to-mah-to.
 
And as far as Twi’s characterization, She’s been shown to have a lot of weird interactions with powerful magic before. It might be the fandom influencing my subconscious with characters like cold-blooded twi or Kayla-Na’s twibra comic being so big and making me think of her character as the one with the darker secrets. Aside from her rapey alter-ego, i feel like she’s no less in-character than any of the others, and her having something kinda dark hidden away inside her just seems pretty natural to me.  
I felt a lot more okay with Dash being able to turn down sex because she’s just as intensely tied to her pride as twilight is to her magic, so something insulting her like that would be like… #1 top-tier turn-off for her. I intended for everyone’s situation in this to be different, and some of them react exactly how you’d expect, and the others run into problems you’d never even think of. As mentioned in earlier comments, this really became a much bigger point in the story than i’d anticipated initially, so yeah, it ended up a little imbalanced as far as who’s in-character and who’s not. Maybe future stories can fix that; we’ll see.

@M-DitzyDoo  

 
Actually, Spike never tried to kill the entire town, he just ROBBED every place (sometimes taking the entire place). The WORST he “maliciously” did to anyone was TRAP the wonderbolts after they attacked him first. Oh, and yell at Fay Wray. In fact, the most dangerous thing that happened was that he recovered from his greed growth and two nearly fell to their deaths.
 
Comparing Twilight maliciously raping him to his greed growth is far from accurate.
 
@bakuhaku
 
One of the reasons this is “bringing drama” is due to the fact that you made very convincing and true-to-character dialogue and characterization, especially with RD and her rejection of Spitfire and her reasoning. Pinkie Pie and the cakes is subjective, especially considering the “suspicious” nature of the fraternal twins. Rarity and AJ still fit well for the characters and cleanly showed they both liked it, just that R accepted it but AJ was reluctant.
 
However, we come off of RD’s fantastic playout of events and into this and things just aren’t right or making sense in the same way. Pinkie didn’t “violently rape” mrs cake. Rarity didn’t “violently rape” AJ, hell, RD turned spitfire down despite being nude and having sex offered on a platter.
 
But then come twilight and she’s subjective to vicious rape tendencies, Spike DOES NOT want to be female, makes a statement about not wanting to be female, is raped for his troubles, then is fine with it.
 
The problem is not so much the drama this brings, but the fact that it’s inconsistent with the rest of it and gives Spike a clear case of stockholm syndrome where “anytime he disagrees, he just needs to be forced into it until he does like it”.
 
Yeah I had my flat out ire early on, but I’ve been taking more of a back seat to the drama part. I’m just too tired, therefore I deconstructed what I’m seeing and why this chapter is rubbing everyone the wrong way.

Hey Baku, related question, what would Spike’s Barb’s voice be like? At the moment, I’m either imaging a highly effeminate male voice or a husky female voice.

Crucial point: Does Spike know Twi is being corrupted by magic or whatever?

@Background Pony #65B5  
This is hentai, so of coarse it fits. The porn-part of the plot demands it.

@gittonsxv  
Probably somethig along the lines of Breath of fire 4’s Minor Dragon Form. Sprouts wings from the back legs and forearms become dragon claws and sprouts a tail as well as eyes and hair changing.

How much ya’ll want to bet Spike fits Twi’s panties and bra perfectly.

@M-DitzyDoo  
Man has a point. On the scale of heinous crimes. Literally trying to murder the planet because you don’t get enough attention is one of the few things that make something like “forcible rape” seem small potatoes. Then again, 1000 years on the moon.

@gittonsxv  
spiraling out of control kinda like Twilight.  
OH SNAP. BURN.
 
I’ll see myself out.

@Exedrus  
Thanks!

@BakuHaku  
i know what you mean.  
it is easy sometimes to go from something simple and it spirals out of control into something much bigger.

@gittonsxv  
like I said, this became a much bigger plot point than I originally intended. Hopefully I can work a little more of it in to the continuing story more organically.

@gittonsxv  
Gitt has a point. Maybe you can create a chapter that takes place before this one so it isn’t spontaneous. I know that you don’t want to do a comic about Twilight raping Fluttershy, but you may need to if you want to form continuity.