GryphonStar5678 Bearded Dialogue Master
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Going uh isn't helping me understand what wrong. Too much detail, not enough details? Are you just lost since the first part of the scene is meant to build-up to the comic strip? Once every detail has been shown off then comic strip can be found again in the blog alongside the scene in full.
Either way a lot builds up this gran event. Not just the parts I showed off in the link. Heck, this moment is practically the climax to a full season of work.
I would love far more criticism than just uh.