@Background Pony #FAEA  

 
*inhales*
 
you need to practice spheres, drawing rings around spheres, drawing things around spheres. fluttershy’s hair line isn’t lined up with her eyes. filly anon’s nose isn’t centered on the vertical line between her ears. fluttershy doesn’t have enough of a forehead. if you draw her head as a sphere, put the hair on top of it, and use a second smaller sphere as a guide of where to draw the snoot, it should look better. fluttershy’s smile is adorable, by the way.
 
fluttershy’s wings should be along her sides, not on her back, so they’d look more sideways from behind like this. feathers radiate out like a fan from the arms of the feather on top, with a layer of smaller feathers covering the big pinions, and a layer of smaller ones over that, looking like curved stairs.
 
when folded, the feathers fold like a folded fan, where most of the feathers cover the other feathers, so you can’t see all the feathers when folded, and the ones you can see are heavily overlapped. draw overlapped feathers by drawing the teardrop “U” shape of the topmost feather, then when you draw the other feathers just abruptly stop drawing before your pencil goes over the already drawn feather. they should all overlap in the same direction, so feathers to the left will always be underneath feathers to the right, or vice versa.
 
this is also how to draw flower petals.
 
there’s no corner to fluttershy’s eyes, and no bridge to her nose in between them, so draw eyes farther apart, and pay attention to the shape: inset lids stretched open and attached at the corners, with a big eyeball underneath that can partially be seen through the space between the eyelids.
 
filly anon’s hair should be thick enough you can’t see through it, instead of thin as a balding 40 year old man. draw hair with less lines, no lines in fact, and if you want it to look like hair instead of plastic, make the edges curl back irregularly, or draw a hair shine with jagged edges to indicate that there’s a lot of tiny little hairs there.
 
take a ruler and some good drawings, and measure the proportions of things: how long their feet are compared to the size of their head, how far down their back their wings attach, how big their eyes are compared to how far apart they are, how far down their face their eyes are.
 
when drawing eyes, lightly sketch the eyelids first, and try to see the eyeball mostly hidden under them, then draw the eye shines, then the pupil underneath them (otherwise you have to erase to get eye shines), then draw the iris around the pupil. don’t draw a line around the iris. be ready to cut off your circle if you’re drawing an iris or a pupil and you hit an eye shine, or the edge of the eyelid. then draw a stronger line for the top eyelid, but not the bottom. the side corner where the top and bottom eyelid meet are where the eyelashes in ponies radiate from. (don’t ask me why.)
 
your ears are shaped well, but remember that the base of the ear actually is a hole in the skull, so draw your ears as if protecting that hole, and swivelling around it. the place where your ear attaches to the head should always be pointing right at the center of the skull, even if the ear curves upward as it gets farther away from the head. if the base isn’t pointed at the center, it’ll look like your ears are sideways and kind of velcroed on.
 
if you want to use yellow letters on white paper, give them a darker outline. (not necessarily black.) and whatever you do, don’t spend a half hour writing advice for some rando online, when you could have been practicing drawing yourself. that’s an advanced technique, and it should only be performed by professional losers like myself.

@Tyuert  
It’s fine. Yeah, I’ve already been doing all of that.

@Background Pony #3D08  
sorry, I suck at giving advice. I guess to start you should just go look around at other peoples work, and try to replicate it. You can start adding your own flair and better your own style that way, or at least that’s how I went about it. I’d point out more specifics but to me it’s all in need of an overhaul. Sorry if I seem rude, but I can’t find a way to better phrase it.

@Tyuert  
I’m always trying to improve my art, anything in particular that could be better?

I don’t know what I’m looking at here, but I don’t like it. Nosiree.