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Description
Appletart is now in a constant dark magic shift due to the stresses of being away from her loved ones and her current situation.
Wish other people would understand that
Its ok. Its normal when someone is starting ;)
I never had story writing lessons, never wrote a story before, didn’t do well in English so forgive me.
Starting. You have some gramatical errors.
Have you even read my story?
Good reference, but it would have been great if you had written Appletart finding the gun in a meteor or crater, instead of having “contac” with the humans. You exaggerated the origin of that gun. And would be veeeeery dumb and stupid of your part that Appletart is kidnapped by humans.
Reference to Fallout 3’s Alien Encounter where the player would gain a unique alien weapon called the Fire Lance (i think). In the encounter you see something explode in midair and the weapon falls to the floor.
Then Why you introduce a human weapon, or that humans were in the pony universe? I found that very pointless and ridiculous, and there is some ubications that are very similiar with the game.
the pregnancy thing i did FIRST, the alien ship never happened in PH nor the use of a human weapon, simularities your seeing came after i did them.
The fact that Appletart had an encounter with a human ship and she is using a human weapon, pregnat. U dont know… I find the story very similar to Proyect Horizonts :/
What’s weird about stopping a giant killing machine?
Thats why I found your fanfic very weird and… the plot is weird after reading it.
Appletart got her wings BEFORE Blackjack did
Sigh
It doesn’t care… Ascended or no ascended, taller or not taller… I dont know where you find that Twi is more taller… Twilight wings are unecessay, it was just for merchandise. You are not understanding, Why you put Appletart wings then? And reading her description in the FoE Wiki, it says she is very good in magic, so good, she could use a human weapon that sh found (wut?).
Also, I just read Proyect Horizonts… and you and Blackjack are the only ponies that was given wings… there is not relation with that?
you really don’t understand do you. Twilight ascended into being an alicorn. She has grown taller and her horn as grown longer as well. She’s a heavy magic user and won’t show her earth pony qualities.
Appletart didn’t ascend, she mutated, there was no point your right. She was just unlucky to get them from a mutation.
Twilight is a Alicorn, and doesnt prove in any time that she have Earth pony qualities, neither the princesses, what you said is a headcannon. Twilight is just a unicorn, a powerful unicorn… but with wings… And for that, thats makes me think that the wings of Appletart are pointless and/or unecessary :/
still doesn’t make her one just because of her horn and wings, like i said before, she does not possess earth pony qualities and does nto have the vast magical pool
But she can use magic and can fly… And you need to know that alicorns are not necessary inmortals.
Alicorns are a combination of all three pony races and possess vast magical reserves and are immortal. Appletart does not possess Earth pony qualities, does not possess a large magical pool and is not immortal.
Alicorn trains? What is it?
Winged-Unicorn as she doesn’t possess alicorn traits
Aaaaaaaaaand she is an alicorn…
Appletart Longshot
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