@Chaikeon
thanks for the criticism, I don’t right often and when I did it’s on the spot also yeah flutters may taste like butterscotch which would be awesome.
Fluttershy : I don’t think he’ll ever hear or see you again, you should have been nicer too the CMC but you being belly fat is much more important goodbye Diamond Tiara. As fluttershy was about to take a nap Diamond Tiara spoke from within her fleshy prison. Diamond Tiara: Why didn’t you eat Silver Spoon then why jus- OW please let me out! I’LL GIVE YOU MONE-OW I’T BURNS PLEAS-. Fluttershy: The reason I didn’t eat SS was because without you around she might become friends with the girls but if not I think i’ll have some company for you, would you like that. There was mo response DT passed out from the lack of oxygen, her body was slowly digested by the butterscotch pegasus. Fluttershy: Oh well have fun in your new home Diamond Tiara. In with that Fluttershy curled up around her belly as it gurgled and churned around the filly that filled it.
Definitely could be better, but I like this!!
do not did sorry again.
thanks for the criticism, I don’t right often and when I did it’s on the spot also yeah flutters may taste like butterscotch which would be awesome.
“Butterscotch pegasus”
That’s, er, an interesting way of incorrectly describing her color…
Unless you mean she tastes like butterscotch. Which actually sounds delightful.
No problem, always glad to be able to help!
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This is a comment section not a “terrible short story with horrible grammar and flow” section.
Thank you. Fixed.
@Background Pony #231E
Shy think so too.
Also, nice job on the pic.