My fanfiction needing feedback

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Magical and Radical!
In the year 2020, I released my fanfic “The Road of Courage” on FIMfiction and Deviantart.
Since then, I wrote so many chapter and I’m currently working on the next side story. The next chapter of the main story will come out soon.
What do you think of my story so far? I’m open for some constructive thoughts and discussions!
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