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Background Pony #5818
Is this one of those comics that will never see the light of day unless you pay up?
EnderFloofs
Solar Guardian - Refused to surrender in the face of the Lunar rebellion and showed utmost loyalty to the Solar Empire (April Fools 2023).
Perfect Pony Plot Provider - Uploader of 10+ images with 350 upvotes or more (Questionable/Explicit)
Twinkling Balloon - Took part in the 2021 community collab.

The Butt Connoisseur
@Background Pony #D33F  
I was kinda worrying less about character and more about just editing what was there so that it flowed better. That’s why I kept his line for that, as it still did the job well. And I don’t feel RD would say “smart guy,” so I just changed wonderful to awesome ‘cause we all know that’s her favorite word, but I may be reading her character wrong. Hioshiru did good with keeping character in line, it’s just the small changes and flow I’m mainly worried about.
 
I know i really doesn’t matter what they say cause they’re gonna fuck anyways, but if language is the weakest part of the comic, it’s arguably the easiest part of a piece of work to fix and it improves the quality by THAT much. The artwork is amazing, and thus it deserves worthy dialogue to match it.
Background Pony #1AC2
@RandomExpert
 
Maybe, continuing from the last page…
 
“HEY, RAINBOW!”
 
“Quibble! Is that you!?”
 
“Who else would I be?”
 
“Smart guy! I can’t believe you’re here!”
 
To me, the dialogue is pointing towards Quibble saying something playfully arrogant. “It’s you!” “I should say so!” plays better with Quibble answering her colloquial exclamation/question with a rhetorical question. Feels more in-character.
 
But to be honest since they’re just going to fuck I don’t think it matters how they say what they say. And you know what? The comic kinda doesn’t even need dialogue from what I can tell so far. The artwork is so strong, you can feel what they’re saying VERY CLEARLY even though the dialogue doesn’t flow as well as it could.
Background Pony #31AA
You can roughly understand what they’re saying using Google Translate. It’s not the best, but it’s understandable.
 
Hmmm….  
(rd, explicit ,! Solo) in the filters and all problems are solved, and no one to the top pizza does not fuck.
 
Roll the sausage over Malaya Spasskaya. Your sparks of indignation are of interest only to you.
 
Close enough.
Background Pony #D3BD
@Vagabund  
Катись колбаской по Малой Спасской. Твои брызги негодования интересны только тебе.
EnderFloofs
Solar Guardian - Refused to surrender in the face of the Lunar rebellion and showed utmost loyalty to the Solar Empire (April Fools 2023).
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Twinkling Balloon - Took part in the 2021 community collab.

The Butt Connoisseur
@hioshiru  
English isn’t your first language, right? It might be helpful if you had a proofreader look at your dialogue before you post it. It’s nothing major but it would be helpful… I don’t know who could do that for you… coughcoughIwanttodoitcoughcough
 
For example, this might flow a little bit better:  
“I should say so!”/“I should say the same thing!”  
“What an awesome surprise!”  
“Long time no see…I’m really happy to see you (again).”
Background Pony #A473
You can roughly understand what they’re saying using Google Translate. It’s not the best, but it’s understandable.