I love this couple please fluttershy do more…if it’s not a bugger y////y[cover eyes while blushing] sorry~count ziltromon

@genervt  
Twist supports SilverTiara shipping and I support Twist!

funny

@Moonatik  
Thanks. I’m glad you liked it.

@A Non Man  
That’s 100x better in my opinion.

I originally linked the version I posted to Uotapo’s Twitter account, but just changed it to an Imgur link. If Sor wants to merge this in to replace the other translation, be my guest.

Here, I made my own version.
 

 
Get it from Imgur

@A Non Man  
I was wondering about the whole senpai bit, sensei makes a lot more sense if she’s an author.

@A Non Man  
Agreed

@A Non Man  
Although, after a night’s sleep, I suppose it could just be her saying “Not here!” as in “We shouldn’t be doing this here.”

Okay, it’s mostly a good translation till you reach that final panel.
 
「あぁ、ダメだガーラス。こんなところで。。。」  
“Oh, Gallus, no! Not there…”
 
「先生！新作楽しみにしてます！！」  
“Teacher! We’re looking forward to your new work!!”
 
That line of dialogue Fluttershy is saying is literally “Oh, no, Gallus. In a place like this…” However, the “In a place like this…” is kind of a trope in romance comics. Considering how the comic Twist has is a lewd Yuri manga and that the speaker in the one being drawn is saying “Oh, no!” usually indicates that she’s being touched in her privates. So, a little translation finesse is required.
 
The other mistake is reading 先生 (sensei, teacher) as 先輩 (senpai, senior).

@Sr Pelusa  
Well, then she really is fujoshy in this comic.

LOL!

Lol this comic makes me funny

Makes more sense with Gallus.

Twist is in trouble now.  
(I demand more Diamond Tiara and SilverSpoon).
 
Gallus does it again.  

Twist is in trouble now.
 

 
I demand more Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon.

Should this count as grounds for libel??

@Sr Pelusa  
i figur they wat to see that

@Background Pony #B482  
Also, “gave to give me” instead of “have to give me”

@Background Pony #B482  
Wait, so Weebshy is actually doing a BL doujin involving Gallus?  

I really do miss seeing DT and SP in the show twist too

There seems to be a mistranslation in the last panel. ガーラス (GAARASU) should probably be “Gallus,” not “Girls.”

@Malekit  
what? tell me you haven’t see a girl looking at two guys art

@Lost Marbles  
I Think you should have kept theoriginal English wording of the comic