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#Comic 1 : Dash’s secret  
#Comic 2 : A gift for Rarity  
#Comic 3 : New friend for Fluttershy  
#Comic 4 : More Fun for Pinkie  
#Comic 5 : Special apple for AppleJack
 
#Comic 6 : here  
#Comic 7 : Good music for Octavia
 
 
Please, dont forget to leave a comment, I want know how improved my work.
 
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Art by : Damlanil
 
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OctiLuna

Looking at all the other comics and coming to understand Slightly what was going on, I would say your art has improved a bit. Your English needs some work still, but your command of the language has also improved from previous comics. The parts I speak of are  
This headphone is awesome
that could be changed to
These headphones are awesome
. Though perhaps space inside the text bubble is an issue. The second issue I saw was
These things is so goooodd%%
I’d keep the longer spelling, because it does indicate how the ‘victim’ is now experiencing heightened forms of pleasure and joy, but you could change it to
These things are so goooodd%%
 
Outside of that, I have no complaints. This comic and all the previous ones are pretty awesome. Nicely done. I hope to see one about Octavia soon.